1- I sent to you both the essay and the prompt is the essay match the prompt? Also, ideas and thises and examples analysis are there good or not please help me to make it better.
2- Take off all the refrences , the professor do not need it.
3- take of the propsitions such as us, we, you from the essay.
4- Take off all the passive grammar
5- corect the grammar and punctuations
6- change the thises and conclusion